Am I Not Important?
My walls are fighting with each other
They can’t seem to agree on what to do with me
So later today, one will simply run away
There are no posters or paintings on the walls
They think they are naked and bare before all
They believe me cruel, uncaring
For them, summer brings sweat and winter chills
They dream of living on sunlit hills
I’ve discovered that I don’t need
Plaster to shield or wood for shelter
An eagle flies above me
As if unbound and free
I can taste their envy
For the things that I love more than them
Am I Not Important? (edited)
My walls are fighting with each other
They can’t seem to agree on what to do with me
So later today one will simply move away
Leaving others to bear the weight
There are no posters or paintings
No colorful covering conceals their form
They think they are naked and bare before all
They believe I’m cruel uncaring
For them summer days bring sweat and winter night chills
They dream of living on sunlit hills
Anywhere but here everywhere but here
I’ve discovered that I don’t need
Plaster to shield or wood for shelter
Fleshly masks or bindings of cloth
An eagle flies above me
Unbound and but not free
Forced to follow a path already taken many times before
I can taste the envy of these four walls
For the things that matter more than them
Lovely poem.
ReplyDeleteThe poem itself is good. But the revision is much better. I like the stuff you added in. Great images and overall just a great poem.
ReplyDeleteI thought this poem was very inspirational. I liked the metaphors and I thought that the revision was a lot more precise. I was confused with a couple of lines, but I think it was your use of inverted syntax. This is insightful. But is this supposed to be inspirational? Does the speaker long to get away from "these four walls" to explore the world? break free? Good job.
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